Starting with dialogue is fine, but there's no sparkle to the writing. The scene setting is bland (she shakes her head and sighs; he chuckles -- very boring, adds nothing to the characterization). I don't know who these people are and the author has given me no reason to care about them. Sorry!
Starting with dialogue is fine, but there's no sparkle to the writing. The scene setting is bland (she shakes her head and sighs; he chuckles -- very boring, adds nothing to the characterization). I don't know who these people are and the author has given me no reason to care about them. Sorry!