I agree about the fabulous prose. I voted 'no', but a couple of minor edits would make me turn the page.
1) The following two sentences gave away too much information about the character too soon: Worse yet, there would be no one there either, no one to know whether she lived or otherwise; and, Living destitute and alone had been a five-year struggle.
2) There's a pirate ship coming? How about the sighting of it in the last paragraph of the page?
I agree about the fabulous prose. I voted 'no', but a couple of minor edits would make me turn the page.
1) The following two sentences gave away too much information about the character too soon: Worse yet, there would be no one there either, no one to know whether she lived or otherwise; and, Living destitute and alone had been a five-year struggle.
2) There's a pirate ship coming? How about the sighting of it in the last paragraph of the page?
D.