Hi!--I would just like more about you--but I do think so far you have kept this very well balanced and very interesting and well done. I love it! Just one tiny thought: Since the names you are using are not Anglo names, and because I am miserable with names anyway, even Anglo ones, I don't remember who it is when you refer to a person again who I should remember and then I have to go hunt for the first reference to the person in question and by then I have forgotten the reason for my mission. If you could just put in a little qualifying phrase after the name to remind those of us with mad memories., I think it would help! I do like to keep track of your circle of friends, acquaintances, helpers, and everyone.
Hi!--I would just like more about you--but I do think so far you have kept this very well balanced and very interesting and well done. I love it! Just one tiny thought: Since the names you are using are not Anglo names, and because I am miserable with names anyway, even Anglo ones, I don't remember who it is when you refer to a person again who I should remember and then I have to go hunt for the first reference to the person in question and by then I have forgotten the reason for my mission. If you could just put in a little qualifying phrase after the name to remind those of us with mad memories., I think it would help! I do like to keep track of your circle of friends, acquaintances, helpers, and everyone.