Steve M (It's kinda tough to really tell how good your material is cause I think you're struggling with your delivery.)
Gave you a direct shoutout on my last post! I took your advice to heart and agreed that my delivery, not my material, needed work. That said, I notice that some of my jokes within my bits aren't working, and I have to come up with new stuff to supplant the old.
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Big Slow (I think the fat bit is the best part of your set. But maybe start it with a different situation...)
Gave you a direct shoutout in my last post! I took your advice to heart and even used the idea of the tent and xxxl shirts at Yuk Yuk's. Thanks!
Khan (Put current stuff on backburner, too fat for the t-shirt working, lose Jamaican stuff, keep a better flow to set, seems like you're cycling through jokes)
Dude, I TOTALLY agree with you on the cycling through jokes part. It's a bad habit picked up from other comics where they just have a bunch of disparate jokes sans cohesion. I have to learn how to relish my set more. Bryan O'Gorman reminded me that my first and last joke need to be the best, because of the primacy and recency effect. Thanks, dude.
Hi my name is Sal Governale (I would like to sincerely apologize for being an asshole in the audience during your set at Eton house.)
92,159 followers on Twitter must be following your for some reason! Either way, thanks for coming out! I did my Jamaican bit, so I deserved to be heckedl that night!
@Massimo (Racist jokes not working with white crowd)
I think you're right, and it's weird that I didn't realize that racist jokes work well when you're speaking directly with the race in question. Russell Peters did well because he would identify a race and then rip on that race, thereby giving him racial immunity by involving them in the joke. GREAT OBSERVATION! Seriously man, thanks.
@Esteban (It was cool how you used the "keep it going..." thing at the beginning. A lot of roasters open with that. Usually that can get a few laughs and calm the nerves.)
Oh yeah - it's a great way to open a set because it allows you to grab the mic, the audience claps, and gets them ready for you while you try to remember what the hell your first line was! I can't take credit; I saw quite a few other pro comics use that line so I Mencia'd it.
I would like to sincerely apologize for being an asshole in the audience during your set at Eton house. Please forgive me as most of what I was saying was alcohol induced.
Thank you and goodnight, much love.
This is a recording.
Little Lupe - 12 years ago
Pennnnnnnnaaaaaaaasssssssssssssssssss
Riley Martin - 12 years ago
Ya still treating me like a bojangles!
Biff - 12 years ago
It's not funny
Biff - 12 years ago
Get rid of the Jamaican shit
Khan - 12 years ago
I think you should maybe put your current stuff on the back burner for the time being and start fresh. I agree with one of the earlier posts about your tight t-shirt fat stuff being the best. When you're telling that bit...you really seem confident and it seems like that's getting laughs. It's great cause you're making fun of yourself and keeping things light.
But drop the Jamaican stuff...it's not working man.
I also think you should keep a flow going with your set. Right now...it seems as though you are just cycling through jokes. Like instead of saying 'im going to end with this one...' just tell a great ending bit and end with 'thanks everyone goodnight'. Know what I mean? The reason I say this is cause if you set up its going to be your last joke...the audience is expecting it to be outstanding...so it better be cause you gotta end on a high. In a way...you kinda put yourself on the spot.
James - 12 years ago
I think once you get over the nervousness...you'll be fine.
The material will just start coming to ya...and you'll realize what is funny to most people...and not just to a few.
Big Slow - 12 years ago
I think the fat bit is the best part of your set. But maybe start it with a different situation...
Like what if you were with a chick and your tits were bigger than hers. She didn't feel too bad though...she had the bigger dick.
Or why do stores even bother having XXXL t-shirts....by this point...shouldn't the label just read fat fuck....or tent?
Steve M - 12 years ago
It's kinda tough to really tell how good your material is cause I think you're struggling with your delivery. Understandably you were nervous...but you'll have to find a way to get around that. There were moments where it was clear you were confident in what you were saying...but not enough of it. You opened with the wrong joke (which I think lost the crowd immediately)...and later on you stopped a joke and told it a different way. The audience is left thinking wtf. How often are you practicing your bits?
Great comeback with the Mr. Clean line on the hecklers.
Esteban - 12 years ago
It was cool how you used the "keep it going..." thing at the beginning. A lot of roasters open with that. Usually that can get a few laughs and calm the nerves.
massimo - 12 years ago
I don't think the Jamaican stuff is going over well with the 'older white crowd.' I think you need to use it in front of a black or West Indian audience. They will get it. I don't think this audience is getting it...nor do they seem to care. In addition...it's tough for that crowd to laugh at a black joke like that. Makes them uncomfortable. Even if they do get it and they agree, if they laugh..it'll look like they're racist. Can you imagine a white dude getting up and yelling out..."Yes Yes...I know...black people and their babies..."
Prob is, you might get killed telling that one with a black audience if you don't tell it right.
Steve M (It's kinda tough to really tell how good your material is cause I think you're struggling with your delivery.)
Gave you a direct shoutout on my last post! I took your advice to heart and agreed that my delivery, not my material, needed work. That said, I notice that some of my jokes within my bits aren't working, and I have to come up with new stuff to supplant the old.
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Big Slow (I think the fat bit is the best part of your set. But maybe start it with a different situation...)
Gave you a direct shoutout in my last post! I took your advice to heart and even used the idea of the tent and xxxl shirts at Yuk Yuk's. Thanks!
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Khan (Put current stuff on backburner, too fat for the t-shirt working, lose Jamaican stuff, keep a better flow to set, seems like you're cycling through jokes)
Dude, I TOTALLY agree with you on the cycling through jokes part. It's a bad habit picked up from other comics where they just have a bunch of disparate jokes sans cohesion. I have to learn how to relish my set more. Bryan O'Gorman reminded me that my first and last joke need to be the best, because of the primacy and recency effect. Thanks, dude.
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Biff (Get rid of the Jamaican shit)
Done. Seriously, I'm not going to do it anymore; not coming out right.
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Riley Martin (Ya still treating me like a bojangles!)
Huh?
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Little Lupe (Pennnnnnnnaaaaaaaasssssssssssssssssss)
Yeeeaaaap....
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Hi my name is Sal Governale (I would like to sincerely apologize for being an asshole in the audience during your set at Eton house.)
92,159 followers on Twitter must be following your for some reason! Either way, thanks for coming out! I did my Jamaican bit, so I deserved to be heckedl that night!
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jefferson (Major Bomb...Atomic if you will.)
I've seen worse...
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Mikko (Yo man....do you have a day job?)
Yeah, I have a day job. I teach a course in Finance; no joke. Need some financial advice? I'm your man; also no joke.
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@Massimo (Racist jokes not working with white crowd)
I think you're right, and it's weird that I didn't realize that racist jokes work well when you're speaking directly with the race in question. Russell Peters did well because he would identify a race and then rip on that race, thereby giving him racial immunity by involving them in the joke. GREAT OBSERVATION! Seriously man, thanks.
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@Esteban (It was cool how you used the "keep it going..." thing at the beginning. A lot of roasters open with that. Usually that can get a few laughs and calm the nerves.)
Oh yeah - it's a great way to open a set because it allows you to grab the mic, the audience claps, and gets them ready for you while you try to remember what the hell your first line was! I can't take credit; I saw quite a few other pro comics use that line so I Mencia'd it.
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Yo man....do you have a day job?
Major Bomb...Atomic if you will.
Hi my name is Sal Governale
I would like to sincerely apologize for being an asshole in the audience during your set at Eton house. Please forgive me as most of what I was saying was alcohol induced.
Thank you and goodnight, much love.
This is a recording.
Pennnnnnnnaaaaaaaasssssssssssssssssss
Ya still treating me like a bojangles!
It's not funny
Get rid of the Jamaican shit
I think you should maybe put your current stuff on the back burner for the time being and start fresh. I agree with one of the earlier posts about your tight t-shirt fat stuff being the best. When you're telling that bit...you really seem confident and it seems like that's getting laughs. It's great cause you're making fun of yourself and keeping things light.
But drop the Jamaican stuff...it's not working man.
I also think you should keep a flow going with your set. Right now...it seems as though you are just cycling through jokes. Like instead of saying 'im going to end with this one...' just tell a great ending bit and end with 'thanks everyone goodnight'. Know what I mean? The reason I say this is cause if you set up its going to be your last joke...the audience is expecting it to be outstanding...so it better be cause you gotta end on a high. In a way...you kinda put yourself on the spot.
I think once you get over the nervousness...you'll be fine.
The material will just start coming to ya...and you'll realize what is funny to most people...and not just to a few.
I think the fat bit is the best part of your set. But maybe start it with a different situation...
Like what if you were with a chick and your tits were bigger than hers. She didn't feel too bad though...she had the bigger dick.
Or why do stores even bother having XXXL t-shirts....by this point...shouldn't the label just read fat fuck....or tent?
It's kinda tough to really tell how good your material is cause I think you're struggling with your delivery. Understandably you were nervous...but you'll have to find a way to get around that. There were moments where it was clear you were confident in what you were saying...but not enough of it. You opened with the wrong joke (which I think lost the crowd immediately)...and later on you stopped a joke and told it a different way. The audience is left thinking wtf. How often are you practicing your bits?
Great comeback with the Mr. Clean line on the hecklers.
It was cool how you used the "keep it going..." thing at the beginning. A lot of roasters open with that. Usually that can get a few laughs and calm the nerves.
I don't think the Jamaican stuff is going over well with the 'older white crowd.' I think you need to use it in front of a black or West Indian audience. They will get it. I don't think this audience is getting it...nor do they seem to care. In addition...it's tough for that crowd to laugh at a black joke like that. Makes them uncomfortable. Even if they do get it and they agree, if they laugh..it'll look like they're racist. Can you imagine a white dude getting up and yelling out..."Yes Yes...I know...black people and their babies..."
Prob is, you might get killed telling that one with a black audience if you don't tell it right.