I would turn the page for Holly because I like her story concept. Even though the opening can use a few tweaks, I feel it's strong because it gets right to the heart of the story concept on the front end, conveys an unusual situation potentially filled with conflict and danger, and she's giving it to us through the eyes/voice of the MC, rather than the author.
I would turn the page for Holly because I like her story concept. Even though the opening can use a few tweaks, I feel it's strong because it gets right to the heart of the story concept on the front end, conveys an unusual situation potentially filled with conflict and danger, and she's giving it to us through the eyes/voice of the MC, rather than the author.