My Sister The Scientist

3 Comments

  • Leslie L Goodman - 4 years ago

    #3 gets my vote for stating specific examples, helping to give a clear picture of Gabby and her predicament. ht

  • Kathy Chalas - 4 years ago

    The “Gabby has a lot to say ...” pitch seems more kid-friendly and shares the essence of her problem without being too wordy or detached. I can glean quite a bit about Gabby and her personality from these few lines!

  • Kim Larson - 4 years ago

    I like 2 because it give more information and isn't as vague as the others.

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