Hi, I noticed you had no comments so I thought I'd be the first.
I voted "no", because this isn't my kind of book. I'm not into baseball.
However, I did like the opening line and wanted to read on. I read till the end, and didn't like this bit:
"Sweat beaded on his forehead. Uncomfortable as he was, he still wasn’t ready to head out onto the field."
I didn't think you needed to put sweat beaded on his forehead as the "clammy" in the sentence before already gave me the picture that he was sweating. The next sentence read a bit clunky... was, wasn't.
Hi, I noticed you had no comments so I thought I'd be the first.
I voted "no", because this isn't my kind of book. I'm not into baseball.
However, I did like the opening line and wanted to read on. I read till the end, and didn't like this bit:
"Sweat beaded on his forehead. Uncomfortable as he was, he still wasn’t ready to head out onto the field."
I didn't think you needed to put sweat beaded on his forehead as the "clammy" in the sentence before already gave me the picture that he was sweating. The next sentence read a bit clunky... was, wasn't.
Good luck. Amanda