Which Passage do you like better?

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  • Linda - 12 years ago

    Just wanted to say, I love your idea of starting a poll

  • Polly Robinson - 12 years ago

    Robyn, I do like passage one better than two, but don't care for two sentences so close together starting with 'back'. I would suggest the second sentence start with 'Now'. The reason I prefer the first is that the language seems richer, I find the second somewhat pared back (that's rich, coming from me!) ~ Polly

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