Not quite, but I see a lot of potential in the story and the characters. I would just need a little more information to keep me reading.
Jill - 11 years ago
"No" as is, but I actually was drawn into Ryan's story and wondered if you could somehow start with that: "The phone in the hotel room startled Ryan Harper just as he pulled the trigger. Which was how he survived shooting himself in the head. . ." And add the main character (and his worries) after a little more Ryan introduction.
Not quite, but I see a lot of potential in the story and the characters. I would just need a little more information to keep me reading.
"No" as is, but I actually was drawn into Ryan's story and wondered if you could somehow start with that: "The phone in the hotel room startled Ryan Harper just as he pulled the trigger. Which was how he survived shooting himself in the head. . ." And add the main character (and his worries) after a little more Ryan introduction.